Hey there and welcome Omar,
you have made a very detailed case study there. So I think it might be good to make it leaner. You can leave out the step jumps in your design thinking graphic and text, because your hiring manager should know that those jumps are always possible. Maybe you can leave out one Persona you deem as dispensable. Since your Flows are linked to your personas, that would already save some space.
If you want to tell a story, it seems to be best to start with your goals, challenges and opportunities. And finish it off with how your project will live on.
You can also use informative headlines in addition to the steps the following information is related to. For example, “Young Professionals Are Health Conscious but Low on Time” if that’s what the main takeaway is. I’d also really like to see how your competitive analysis influenced the process.
It would be great to have bigger copy in your Behance project. It’s hard to read.